Monday, August 15, 2011

You Will been Someone Who Around You

        Long ago, there was a polar bear that lived with a group of penguins on a small island. He always laughed at the penguins for their strange sharp mouths. He thought that he was so lucky he had a round mouth. After a couple of years, he felt lonely. He started to play with the penguins. He was used to living with sharp mouthed penguins now because he saw them every day and everywhere. One day, he was looking for fish. In the water, he saw a strange polar bear which had a sharp mouth. He pointed to the water and laughed. He told his penguin friends about this funny story, but the penguins didn't laugh. Then, he heard one of them said We are used to it.”  He stroked his face. Suddenly, he touched something sharp on his face. It was a sharp mouth. He was shocked when he figured out how ridiculous he was. He was not a natural polar bear anymore.

2 comments:

  1. Great story, Jason. Also a lot of errors.
    Almost 20. See if you can find some of them.
    L.

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  2. Much better Jason. Try to remember the original errors so you do not make them again. It can be helpful to write in MS Word to see the spelling and grammar mistakes.

    Les.

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